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Girls are not made of sugar.

We do not melt under a single touch.

Our hearts aren’t made of glass,

They’re  made of muscle, 

and will never shatter under your crushing blow.

Our skulls aren't filled with poetry.

It’s instead filled with pictures and broken desires, dreams and hopes.

Not glitter.

Nor sequins.  

Girl’s hair is not made of silk,

It is instead, made up of dead cells that we hide behind,

But not from you; for you’re nothing to fear.

Our hearts are only there to pump our blood.

Our hair is only there to cover our heads.

Our muscles are there to help us move.

And our brains are there to help us think.

We are not there for you.

We can survive without you.

Our bones refuse to break.

And we’ll always end up standing,

Without you.

Because It’s only you,

Who can’t survive without us.

I hate valentines day...
Had a bad er... 'Break up' if you can call it that, and I'm a little tired of being looked at as if I'm made of glass, or am a monster, or an unrecognizable creature.
...  Just tired in general.
Nap time.
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Edit- I never thought I would get so many views on this. Thank you all.
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Edit 2-- Oh dear. This was never meant to be hateful towards men in general, I was just a wee bit angry. I'm very sorry if I offended some of you, it was never meant to be that way, but an outlet for my own feelings. (I never thought that many people would see it in general.) I do greatly appreciate the criticism though, and I respect all of your opinions. Thank you.  
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Edit 3 --
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After reading, and re-reading, and re-reading this idiotic poem again, and again, and again I find certain flaws within myself, just within a single line. (And yes, I did use a bunch of 'ands' in that sentence, aren't I a rule breaker?) And I have a few things to say.

I'm not changing the poem. I refuse to. Not only would it ruin it, but honestly, it would probably break my heart to do so.
It's not that I'm some radical feminist, that I want all the men in the world to 'burn' or something like that; it's not, I swear. When I wrote this, that was far from my mind. Honestly, I was just angry, pitifully, and pathetically, angry that I was being almost harassed by someone who refused to stop texting me. And honestly, what annoyed me more was that they didn't spell half the words out. So Valentines day - 2014, I was rather some pissy chipmunk, shoving her cheeks with chocolate.
Now, yes, after getting some of the replies on this, I am now quite feminist-- and this probably fueled my writing rage for a few days. (Which, to those, I say thank you.) 
But let me remind you; this is a poem.
This is just emotion.
This wasn't meant to attack anyone.
This was me- pushing away from some idiot, who wouldn't leave me alone.
And spell out their words.
The end.
Nothing to it.
Thank you, and have a safe and wonderful year.

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:iconkrebony:
krebony Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I love this piece. It's raw and emotional and REAL. Fantastic job with this~
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YoungAndWyse Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Despite some of the previous attention this has received, this is great. Thank you for sharing.
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
I could sense that you were angry when you wrote this. I didn't get an "I'm trying to offend" feel from it -- more like an "I'm going to get this off my chest or I'll explode" feel -- but the energy, the tension, is very evident. And I agree with most of it ("most" meaning everything but the last two lines); we have this tendency to romanticize ourselves and others, leading to unrealistic expectations. So we need to be honest with ourselves, and with others -- remind ourselves and others that we are human beings, not porcelain dolls or damsels in distress, but human beings with our own minds and the ability to stand on our own.  
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Student General Artist
:squee: This is amazing!
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
so much feeling in here.. ;-;
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jojo22 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You go girlfriend!  You go! 
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Pointerofreality Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014

I am a man and this offends me.

That said, I can see the place it's coming from even if I don't agree with the way it's laid out :/

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citybuilder Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
femines war cry 
nice
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Schellah Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Okay, es bueno que nos traigas a la realidad y nos bajes de las estrellas; pero si tuviste una mala experiencia, no significa que odies a los hombres por eso. El mundo funciona porque un hombre y una mujer se complementaron, ellos necesitan a ellas, y ellas necesitan a ellos. Es así y no se puede cambiar porque está en la naturaleza que Dios nos ha dado. Y, bueno, me parece una bonita escritura, pero recuerda que, aunque no todo es color de rosa, tampoco es todo gris y malas experiencias.
Un saludo! ;D
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I'm sorry you had that bad experience. But at least you managed to let it out with this poem. 
Some men may not like it but one can see you just need to express your frustration :)
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facetspera Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, the last six lines are quite hateful towards men. :) Not that I mind, I'm all for self-expression.
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toxicity260 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
I feel bad about your break up my friend. :(
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
.-. Well, er, it wasn't really... I wasn't... fsklfjs
Thank you~ And it's fine.
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toxicity260 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
Okay my friend.
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MixedSunlight Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh, yes... be angry, by all means... Grr... :saddummy:

:D
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Jonnyredstone Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
I agree
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SailorMeowMeow Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
beautiful
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pumaninjamonkey Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
This is absolutely wonderful! I personally like the last line. I don't believe poetry needs censorship, it's about emotion. If you feel like hating a certain group (though I don't see that here) it's your own story. 
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
While I do like this poem and agree with many aspects of it, I do strongly disagree with the last line. If we're talking about a relationship, than neither can survive without the other. Taking into account that you wrote this because of a breakup, I see a lot of hate directed towards men as a whole within this piece. Though I don't believe you had the intention of communicating it that way, this is primarily what I see, an angry response to men due to the fact that one broke your hear. I like your you attribute realistic qualities to us girls as a whole, but because you communicate this as a "whole", the opposite gender gets the same negative effect. So I find this a little hateful. 
But I do like most of it, it's just the last line that kinda ruins it for me. 
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Oh yes... I've receiving a lot of feedback on the last line. Thank you so much for your criticism, it really does mean a lot to me (and I greatly appreciate it.) And I can really see why so many people are reacting to the end like they are. I do say I regret the last line, it was supposed to leave an impact, but instead it left repulsion... Although changing it would make the writing fall apart, I will see if I can put some explanation into it. It was never meant to be hateful-- but just to prove that women are nothing but strong individuals. 
Thank you so much.
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks for the feedback, and I do agree that removing the last line would greatly take away from the piece. 
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T8KN4GRANTED Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Yes you guys are!  The things you think are flaws, are the things that guys wish for.  
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I should've put this in my other comment, but that's unrelated.
If this was not a true break-up of a true relationship, then, I'm just gonna say it, this poetry is bad and stupid. In a healthy relationship, you surrender your emotions almost wholly, if not wholly, for the bettering of yourself and the other. To be stoic and unnerved by the loss of release or of what once was, or the hope of what once again could be, is almost a murder of the attributes that prove you are a living, thinking being. To just not talk about what you feel is to morph yourself into something that lives and survives. Your existence is to serve others, even if you are unaware of it. I know I'm assuming a lot here and that I'm being judgemental, but prove me wrong, and do it honestly.
Again, if this is not based off of a true relationship-end, then this is misleading poetry.
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Gosaku Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm having a very hard time with understanding your use of "you" in this. Friends? Men? It seems that, for the majority of the time at least, you are directing your thoughts to the friends who pity you or despise you for one reason or another. But, the way those finalizing stanzas are portrayed leads me to think that you misunderstand the purpose of friends. I don't wish to judge, I'm just criticizing and hoping for some clarification.
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
No, this is directed at people in general. We're made of flesh and bone, and nothing else. The way I wrote this was on my own personal experience where I recently broke my ankle and I'm experiencing they're treating me as if I'm made of glass. (Which I find amusing.) I do appreciate your criticism, this is your right as a person and individual, and I'm not offended. But I never thought this piece would've been so widely... Distributed... And I only made it for me and perhaps something to fill a slot in the magazine I work at. Thank you.
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ShyDreamer95 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student General Artist
So true :) Very well said.
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Thank you. Panda Emoji-11 (Clap) [V1] 
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ShyDreamer95 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Your welcome :D
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badhwar Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Dis is d best 1 dat i had ever seen....congo,  dear Clap 
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Thank you so much, this means a lot to me. Panda Emoji-10 (Blush) [V1] 
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badhwar Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
even my frnz appreciated alot ur deviation...I myself write poems but leaving other poets poems n even mine ones dis 1 is my favourite.....All d things u wrote r marvellous.....
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Aqureshi1 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Senpai, thank you for writing the most inspirational piece of work in history....


P.S You deserve a cookie! Broken Fighting Dome (Kawaii Please) 
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
XD Thank you. Panda Emoji-07 (Snuggy) [V1] 
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gladius212 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
I respect this, any man who truly believes and follows this, any woman who believes this, and any living creature who does not discriminate on others.
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Thank you for commenting~
-I'msoundinglikeanovereagerhostess...Ohdear.-

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gladius212 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
You're welcome

Such is your right, you deserve it.
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MissDarlingJess Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
<3
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
<3
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KittySib Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like how strongly the emotions bleed through the words! Wonderful!:D
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Thank you. XD
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FlyTheFish Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Most of my friends and I are of the same opinion. 
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
XD I only found out how many girls have the same frame of mind today. But thank you, for the favorite and the comment both. It means a lot to me.
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FlyTheFish Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You have to bring it up and get strange looks from adults and get the 'that's how I feel' look from other girls. 
I'm just glad we're not too much of an oddball group. 
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Student General Artist
I am so glad you wrote this. I too am tired of people always assuming that girls "need" a boy in their life. Personally, I am happy without one. There's no drama that way =p
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Thank you so much. X3
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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WishingDreamer5 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist
Finally! Someone who shows how strong girls are in general.
This is a very powerful piece. Well done! :la:
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Thank you so much. XD I didn't realize I would get so much feed back for this...

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WishingDreamer5 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist
Aww, you're welcome :hug:
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kitsunemimichan Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: thank you for writing this
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